LINE EDITS

here is an example of some line edits i performed on a short article. i wanted to keep the original author’s voice as intact as possible and maintain the integrity of the document, so i kept these edits minimal and focused on grammatical inconsistencies over style edits.

BEFORE

Halle Berry exposed herself and her stretch marks just a week ago when she was trying to hide from the paparazzi. Halle Berry almost gave me a hard attack as she drove erratically trying to not have her picture taken. She was going in circles and pretending to turn left and suddenly making a right turn out of the far left lane. Halle used to be sweet to the paparazzi but now she is a total biatch. She literally circled around five blocks for about and hour and then suddenly made a stop at Barefoot restaurant. I ran out of my car as fast as I could so that I could get a nice picture of her and her boyfriend walking together but she was having none of that. She got out of her car purposely looking at the window of the car the whole time so that I wouldn’t be able to get a picture. Unfortunately for her, she was so busy hiding her face she didn’t notice that her flimsy top was wide open, exposing her bra and her stretch marks. Yes ladies and gentlemen, Halle Berry has stretch marks. There is a God! 

DURING

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AFTER

Just a week ago, Halle Berry almost gave me a heart attack as she drove erratically to avoid having her picture taken. She was going in circles, faking turns, and driving unpredictably. Halle used to be sweet to the paparazzi, but now she is a total bi-atch. She literally circled around five blocks for about an hour, before suddenly making a stop at Barefoot Restaurant.

I got out of my car as fast as I could to take a nice picture of her and her boyfriend walking together, but she was having none of that. When she left her car, she purposefully looked at the window of the car the whole time, so that I wouldn’t be able to get a picture. Unfortunately for her, she was so busy hiding her face that she didn’t notice that her flimsy top was wide open, exposing both her bra and her stretch marks. Yes, ladies and gentlemen, Halle Berry has stretch marks. There is a God!